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-      <i>Drill</i> was a film shot by Hito Steyerl at the Park Avenue Armory in New York City.
-      The piece centered around gun violence in America, both its history (the Armory is where
-      the NRA was founded) and the present-day situation where mass shootings happen nearly
-      every week.  These data sonifications act as timelines of gun violence, where each beat
-      marks the passing of a month, and each note represents a tragic incident.  Through this
-      process, a dark melody naturally emerges.
+      <i>Drill</i> was a film shot by Hito Steyerl at the Park Avenue Armory in New York City. The piece centered around gun violence in America, both its history with the founding of the NRA at the Armory in 1871, and the present-day condition where mass shootings happen nearly every week. These data sonifications act as timelines of gun violence, where each beat marks the passing of a month, and each note represents a tragic incident.  Through this process, a dark melody naturally emerges.
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-      I scored the film using data sonifications of mass shooting data, performed using the
-      Deepmind 12 and JX-8P synthesizers.  These were later arranged and performed by the Yale
-      University Precision Marching Band in the Park Avenue Armory Drill Hall.
+      I scored the film using data sonifications of mass shooting data, performed using the Deepmind 12 and JX-8P synthesizers.  These were later arranged and performed by the Yale University Precision Marching Band in the Park Avenue Armory Drill Hall.
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     <h3>This is the Future / Power Plants</h3>