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From: Jules Laplace <julescarbon@gmail.com>
Date: Wed, 17 Feb 2021 16:13:13 +0100
Subject: copy edit

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       <i>Drill</i> was a film shot by Hito Steyerl at the Park Avenue Armory in New York City.
       The piece centered around gun violence in America, both its history (the Armory is where
       the NRA was founded) and the present-day situation where mass shootings happen nearly
-      every week.  I scored the film using data sonifications of mass shooting data, performed
-      using the Deepmind 12 synthesizer and JX-8P.  These data sonifications act as timelines of
-      gun violence, where each beat represents the passing of a month, and each note represents
-      a tragic incident.  Through this process, a dark melody naturally emerges.  These were later
-      arranged and performed by the Yale University Precision Marching Band in the Drill Hall
-      at the Armory.
+      every week.  These data sonifications act as timelines of gun violence, where each beat
+      marks the passing of a month, and each note represents a tragic incident.  Through this
+      process, a dark melody naturally emerges.
+    </p>
+    <p>
+      I scored the film using data sonifications of mass shooting data, performed using the
+      Deepmind 12 and JX-8P synthesizers.  These were later arranged and performed by the Yale
+      University Precision Marching Band in the Park Avenue Armory Drill Hall.
     </p>
 
     <h3>This is the Future / Power Plants</h3>
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